This poem is very special to me, I've been meaning to put this up for ages now. I composed this in class 9 for the poetry event in Chairos Quiro(Qms fest)under the time limit of an hour and it got me the bronze medal! Enjoy....
You may say that I'm a dreamer,
but I'm not the only one.
You may say that I'm a thinker,
but I'm not the only one.
Look around me and you will find-
thousands of others
all starry eyed,
nurturing hopes and dreams in their minds,
unaware and unaffected
by the complexities of life.
You say that I have no touch with reality,
You say that I have lost my mind.
But look around you,
can't you see?
so many, so alike?
You say I'm not an earthly being,
you say my mind flies high in the sky,
In your eyes
a prisoner am I,
because I choose to dream,
because I choose to let my spirit and mind fly,
but why do I bear your glance alone?
Can't you see the others cry?
Can't you hear them crying out,
Their voices filled with anguish and despair?
They want to leave behind earthly boundaries,
they want to dream,
they want to dare.
Then why just point a finger at me?
Why alone label me a dreamer?
look around you
there are thousands here
who want to follow my lead.
Are you blind?
Can't you see them,
the dreamers of the society?
They are crying out today
to tell you that I'm not alone,
and the title of a dreamer
by all of them shall be borne.
You may say that I'm a dreamer,
but I'm not the only one.
You may say that I'm a thinker,
but I'm not the only one.
Look around me and you will find-
thousands of others
all starry eyed,
nurturing hopes and dreams in their minds,
unaware and unaffected
by the complexities of life.
Luv the circular structure as in Tithonus n other Coleridgean conversational poems.U finish where u began and yet there is a sense of pseudo development or progression of ideas.It's a conscious shift of the 'Poetic I' n even the poetic process....n yet the return to the finite poetic time zero when the process begins makes the reader more aware of your viewpoint!Great punch lines...the sporadic rhyming amazingly avoids an jerk in the narrative.
ReplyDeleten the fact that u wrote this in class 9 n within an hour makes it incredible!I take several hours to write anything.Sheer genius u r!but yes, I have a complaint.This deserves the gold medal for sure...not bronze, not bronze!!!!
*any jerk
ReplyDelete@ Deeptesh! Thank u so much! Even I cant analyze my writing the way you do! I just write what I feel in simple words... Its an honor to be appreciated so highly by you! Love you!
ReplyDeletebrilliant!and u're not the only one...
ReplyDeleteThank u!
ReplyDeletewonderful. after reading this i feel like the narrator and can proudly proclaim that im not the sole dreamer. thank you
ReplyDeleteThank u Reeju... :)
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